Mr Joe Chancely
I… I don’t have much time, but I just have to type this up. I’ve been hurt… pretty bad… There’s so much…blood I… I think I’m gonna die… I’m so scared. But I have to get the message out! I just need to make myself heard before it’s too late.
I understand now. So many people disappear every year and not a trace of them is ever found again. This is what will happen to me so it will be a waste of time searching for me. The creature it’s smarter than us and it makes absolute sure that it leaves not a trace of its horrible crimes. But today it made one mistake… or… I did.
Guys, today I saw things words cannot describe nor can the human mind fully comprehend. I know my fate and many others’ too…
It’s too late for me, but it’s not for you. My advice to you i
SHIT! It’s… it’s coming for me. I can hear it… It’s in the house…
Look, it doesn’t matter what this… thing looks like so I won’t waste my time describing it to you. I don’t have the time and believe me, you’ll KNOW if you see it and if you see it… it’ll be too late. What’s important right now is that you hear what I have to say.
I know you guys love to be scared, damn so did I… I’m not gonna tell you to stop watching creepy films or reading creepy stories, go ahead, it’s usually completely harmless. That’s not why I’m in this mess…
Oh god… I just saw its face! That grotesque, sickening face!! I fucking… It fucking left me. I- I think I’m gonna be sick…
It’s still in the house, but… I hid in the closet when I heard it coming down the hall, but I know… I just KNOW that it saw me. It KNEW I was there so why… why the FUCK did it walk away?! I… I really don’t know. It’s toying with me.
I’m… having trouble staying awake now. I know I’m losing blood, but… I… I can’t remember why… I’m in the closet now. That…. Thing knows I’m here. It’s just outside, but… I’m used to it now. For some reason it can’t… or just won’t attack… It’s just watching me. I can FEEL it watching me.
I don’t know how long I’ve been in here now… I must have passed out. My leg feels almost… twisted… I can’t explain it. It hurts like hell. There’s a large gash in my left arm and it won’t stop bleeding. I know that thing is still just outside the closet…
I honestly don’t know how much longer I have but… I don’t think I’ll make it through to dawn… If anyone ever reads this know that I never meant for this to happen and to my family… I love you all so much… This is why I won’t say what happened to me or what I did…
To those of you who are curious, I get it, but I can’t tell you…
I… hear movement… I… oh no…
My final advice to you- live your life, hell, explore and have fun! Just… for heaven’s sake… STAY AWAY FROM,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,
This note was found at 206 Branley Way the residence of a Mr Joe Chancely. It seems he may have had some sort of episode and fled from his home. He has been missing for several days, investigations are currently underway.
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Meh, not enough detail([spoiler]why would you warn us to keep away from a creature, if you don’t tell us what it looks like? You’re basically just killed us all instead of helping us[/spoiler]), felt cliched(again, [spoiler]not telling us more of the creature, the “I’m about to die and here’s my final advice”, a note found and the writer is not found[/spoiler]), and tons of filler in here, so much for that advice man. Sorry, but that’s a 3/10 for me
Oh no! Stay away from[spoiler] … hold on…oh shit oh shit, here it comes.[/spoiler] Sorry, there is no time to explain…. oh shit? In all seriousness, why would you do this?
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Didnt enjoy this at all, could not see this happening in real life, if you tweaked it some then maybe it would be a good read
It was overall a nice short story. I wish it had a cleaner ending though. Cliffhangers are great when you’ve built up enough suspence, but this story was just shy of that mark. Also, there were a bit too much swearing for my taste, but that’s just me. I did like the format it was written in and I like the vagueness of the monster 🙂
It’s R Kelly. He’s trapped in the closet
The twist! I absolutely loved it and I could perfectly imagine the scenario of it being an old, rustic recording, from a video camera, or something like that. It was great! Keep up the good work!
Sorry but it seem stupid and a bit cliche that the person managed to say all that but when it came to the point of actually giving crucial info thats where it ended.
It was nice the lack of detail gave a mysterious sense to the story. Nice job!
WHAT DO I NEED TO KEEP AWAY FROM!!!???
This is a good pasta, I would have had it way longer like after it found him it dragged him somewhere and he had to escape, but its still good 8/10
I think its great! Every sentence I was holding my breath.