Coffins used to be built with holes in them, attached to six feet of copper tubing and a bell. The tubing would allow air for victims buried under the mistaken impression they were dead. In a certain small town Harold, the local gravedigger, upon hearing a bell one night, went to go see if it was children pretending to be spirits. Sometimes it was also the wind. This time, it wasn’t either. A voice from below begged and pleaded to be unburied.
“Are you Sarah O’Bannon?” Harold asked.
“Yes!” The muffled voice asserted.
“You were born on September 17, 1827?”
“Yes!”
“The gravestone here says you died on February 20, 1857.”
“No, I’m alive, it was a mistake! Dig me up, set me free!”
“Sorry about this, ma’am,” Harold said, stepping on the bell to silence it and plugging up the copper tube with dirt. “But this is August. Whatever you are down there, you sure as hell ain’t alive no more, and you ain’t comin’ up.”
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Harold be like…I ain’t got time for any of that creepy shit
It’s pretty good story
Well written but could have used a little more suspense
Rekt
I feel like I would be Harold in that moment because, yeah.
You’re off to a great start…
GREAT STORY
I absolutely loved this pasta! Very creepy and would love to see a longer version of something like this if she had actually gotten out! But this is my favorite pasta yet!!!
Delicious/10 quirky twist kinda kawaii
Very good, to hit it in a few lines is hard.
I don get it ._.
i have seen some minor hate comments but i would love to see this on everything i read! it was fantastic and if you wrote this at 6 you r very twisted js lol plus its true. even if she was in a coma she would have a heartbeat and still breathing plus she would still need food and water or she would die in like a month or two.
Good story, but I didn’t feel the chill or the fright. This is great, I love it, but terror is an important part of the story.
I found that the pacing of this pasta was a little tricky. On the one hand it could have been written a bit more poetically, micropastas tend to be pretty linguistically tight. On the other I really liked the casual nature of the narration and the abruptness of the ending. I love it as is and would never suggest a change but in future, when you’re punching as hard as you are with a good ending, you can afford to lean on it a touch more as a punchline. brah-vo!
Love the concept but you could have taken more time to develop the suspense. Writing short pastas is very difficult to pull off. Especially those that stay with you long after they’ve been read. You had the right idea. Rewrite it, don’t rush it. You have a spark with this one… Light the fire.
This is absolutely great. Had to read it to my entire family. 10/10!
Not the twist I was hoping. Plus it’s too short. If this was somehow elaborated on and suspense was built up (heavily) it could have at least been a 3 star story.
This is stupid. I made up stuff like this when I was 6.
A classic of a smart man. Love this story good post!