I sit up with a jolt, disorientated.
If it weren’t for the sensation of my eyelids coming together to shield my eyes, I would not be able to determine whether or not they were open. The inky blackness presses In from all angles, suffocating me. You’d think after all the time I’ve spent trapped in this murky prison I’d have adjusted. No, it’s still quite a shock to be released from the depths of unconsciousness, only to be greeted by an infinite plain of shadows.
I glance around, looking for something, some object from long ago that will reassure me. I need to know some of my old world still remains.
Nothing.
I’m alone.
A white light flashes to the left of my… vision, if it can be called that. I ignore it. I’ve come to realise that it’s only purpose is to generate hope of this blanket of soot lifting.
I hear a creak — a door opening.
“Cath, you’d better get up. We’re leaving for Granddad’s house in about an hour. Start getting ready, ok?”
I sigh. “Yeah, alright, mum.”
“Oh, and your cane and shades are in the kitchen, near the bird cage.”
I sigh again.
I really enjoyed the concept, especially with my background. The adjectives you used in the beginning really threw me into the story, maybe you could continue that style to the end, you kinda lost me at the ending, with the loss of description. Overall, amazing job, 8/10.
Scary. not scary if you just read it, but if you think deeper into it, it becomes terrifying. great job. 10/10
Absolutely terrifying and extremely wonderful, displaying the fear and terrors. 11/10.
People do indeed face true horrors every day….
brilliant
Great food for thought piece
. Establishing extremes to reveal a situation few suffer. I love stuff that makes you think like that. Simplicity at its finest.
Yes, I know how the narrator feels. I have Nyctophobia and [spoiler]being blind[/spoiler] means a terrifying life to me.
A delicious pasta indeed. 🙂
Just two words:
Absolutely Terrifying
5/5
For those whom claim this is not a creepypasta, or creepy at all, re-read it and really feel the pasta. Really imagine your life as being blind, and be the character. Living in only darkness for the rest of your life, and never being able to change that is honestly a CREEPY concept to grasp. 5/5. Bravo!
I guess you have to have a certain type of mindset to agree that this does indeed belong here.
Very good. I liked this pasta quite a lot. The way you [spoiler]begin to describe it as a nightmare, and turn it into blindness,[/spoiler] really emphasis the true horror of living like this
I wonder if all blind people live like this? In a constant nightmare.
The girl’s blind?! Oh God, I truly feel sorry for her.
I’m confusled! that’s not scary!
SOOOOOOOOOO AMAZING!!!!! I LOVE IT!!!!!!!
The pasta almost made me cry a bit but it was good. 4/5
It took me a second until I understood, good tale, a life tapped.
awwwwwww this is sad and well desriptive it made me realize how a blind person feels. it envolps my heart with sympathy and sorriful understanding. i could hear my heart shatter like drops of rain on an old tin roof. this made me tear up and i now apriaciate what i do have ;-; -layla gruffs
the person is blind. this is a bit of a peek into the true life horror of blindness. a cure of sorts
Dude…..so……freaking…..AWESOME!!! I loved it!!! Way to go!